This is the third
time this has happened, Henry thought. Every day when Henry would arrive from
work, the downstairs basement door would be open. At first he thought that he
had mistakenly left it open, but he couldn't have done that three days in a
row. “I think I should give the police a call,” Henry said out loud. When the
police arrived, they inspected the basement downstairs to see if anyone had
been down there, but they found no evidence. “It must be the wind, nothing
else,” said Constable George. “I guess..,” replied Henry timidly. As the day
went on, nothing unusual happened other than a freak storm appearing out of
nowhere. It was around 7 O’clock that night when Henry was watching the news.
“Well tonight is going to be a tough night for the citizens of Roseville. It
appears to be that all electricity will be going out because of the storm, so
if I were you I would get some matches and candles ready. Tonight is going to
be a very long night,” finished the man. Henry started to worry a bit; he was never
a big fan of the dark. He quickly rushed into the kitchen and opened the drawer
which contained all the materials he needed for a night like this. As he
finished his dinner, he looked outside the window. Never in his 45 years of
living in Roseville had he ever seen something like this. Around 10 O’clock is
when the storm started to get worse and worse. You could hear the rain smashing
against the windows as if someone was throwing rocks at it. The wind was
blowing harder than ever as if a tornado was headed our way, and not a single
soul was seen out on the streets. Henry sat nervously on his couch, really
wishing that his wife and son could be here right now. But he knew that they
could never return, not after what he did to them. Shaking the thought out of
his head, he continued to watch TV to pass away the time. Right when the clock
struck 12, the power went out. Henry had been drifting off to sleep, so he
thought he might as well go to bed and hopefully the lights will be on by
tomorrow. As he grabbed his matches and candles and headed up the stairs, he
heard a weird noise coming from downstairs. But he ignored it, thinking it was
the wind and continued up to his room. Just as he laid down in bed and put his
covers on, he heard the noise again, and this time he couldn't ignore it
because it was way too loud. He lit up a candle and proceeded to go down
the stairs. As he walked to the main floor, he noticed spots of red all over
the stairs. The minute he set his foot on the ground, he could tell someone had
been in his house. His TV was knocked down, all the pictures were pulled down
and torn, and his furniture was ripped and shredded to pieces as if a dog had
been here. His first thought was to call the police, but something in his guts
told him to go downstairs. As he made his way to the door that would lead him
to the basement, he could feel his heart beating fast. He walked slowly, every
step creaking because of his movement. Once he reached downstairs, his candle
blew out. He frantically searched for a match to light up the candle once
again. Once he could see again, he could see there was a trail of red spots
leading up to one of the bedrooms. As he made his way there, his heart was
pounding. Just as he was about to reach for the doorknob, the doorknob turned
by itself. He couldn't believe what he had seen, and before he could even
react, a gust of wind pushed him into the room. He tried opening the door as
hard as he could, but the door wouldn't budge. As he slowly turned around, he
was horrified by what was written on the wall, “I told we’d be back.” As he
turned his head, he saw them. He saw his wife and son covered with blood,
standing in the corner of the bedroom. And that’s when everything blacked out.
Ummm... creeepy!! I like the descriptions and the fact that you didn't tell us what the dude did to his family. Every time someone speaks, or thinks, you need to use quotations and start a new paragraph. :)
ReplyDeleteI love how your story is intesne and it is descriptive enogh that I can see little images in my head. I also love the ending its so dramatic.
ReplyDeleteGood story. Great ending
ReplyDeletevery creepy story. good idea not to tell the reader about what he did to his family
ReplyDeleteGreat job on your story! it was good but i think you should break up your story in paragraphs
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